Choc's and Mike's Song (still very unpolished)

this would probably belong into the music forum but i figured more people would look at it here

Mike and i have just had a little chat and came up with a song (well, mike did the most part). It's still very unpolished and we haven't changed any lines yet, just wrote it down as we went along.

Tell us what you think about it so far....you know, the idea in general and everything. But before ripping us apart remember we really haven't worked on it yet here it goes:

Every Man is an Island - Every girl is the Sea,
Lap up on my shores,
& Come sail away with me
We don't have to be apart,
I want to be free
Why does every man have to be an island
& every girl the sea

When it all began - we were but as one
Even Island was linked
Every sea not just one
Then u captured me
Swept me away
I became an island
In your beautiful sea

Bridge - Type thing

I long to see the shores that used to be there for me,
The beach's my friends - the roads we would travel, beauty just came & went
But I glanced on u & my free love just went, danger abound, though I knew what it meant,
And I soon realised as it has come to be
That every man is an Island, Every girl...The sea

We could imagine it's something Shania Twain could sing ...
Not bad ... :P

Hmm - Shania Twain

It is about a guy falling in love & being cut off from what he once knew (I.e. Friends - a 'free' life), but knowing it could be no other way - beause of him being so deeply in love.

I think

Mike

that's why i said that, it's a story (i don't know why) but i can see her sing it ???
don't ask why !!!! it's like that !!! that's all !!! :P

but i think the story is nice and so many people know this situation

happy ???

COOL!

Impressive!

I hope thats not why you were asking if I was on msn mike!

I could have added some rude words mind

glad you're all liking it

and goose, you may make suggestions if you like :P

Sorry Goose - Song was done by then, but I'd like to hear the rude version