lol, you're completely ****ed up man!!!!!

It was very interesting...... What do you think on them, there were a few ideas, specifically:

"it's more than
just satisfying to me.
Believe me man,
Revenge can kill yourself. ", and from the other poem

"I'm down, like I've been a thousand times
this time's harder, 'cause there's someone
that can be blamed. "

What's the insperation for these poems......

I'm not goign to say too much negative, becuase I do think they're good, certainly for you 3rd attempt? and I'm not posting up things I've written! But, I'd say that the sort of over the top, extreem ideas on death, and killing e.t.c slightly deflect from any idea, or emotion in the piece. To put forward stong emotions, you don't have to make the poem loud, and agressive.
"First I thought you were my friend
now I'm sure you're just a piece of sh*t
I wish that I could kick your ass "
This very 'in your face' element gives a feeling that it's more just bursting out thoughts, as opposed to arranging them to come up with a deeper, or more profound idea. There are certainly some interesting ideas, but I think they could have been more effective with a little more struture to the poem......

Hoever, still a top effort, well done!

Are they meant to be set to music at all?