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Old 06-14-2003, 10:29 PM
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I can't take a vacation! I gotta keep writing. Otherwise I don't know what to do with my time. Anyway, the problem is, I don't have anything. I come up with one or 2 lines and junk 'em. It sucks. I'd like to write about the sort of loyalty you see when you read The Outsiders, but everything I write comes out as either a cheesy ballad, or it just sounds weird.

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I can't take a vacation! I gotta keep writing. Otherwise I don't know what to do with my time. Anyway, the problem is, I don't have anything. I come up with one or 2 lines and junk 'em. It sucks. I'd like to write about the sort of loyalty you see when you read The Outsiders, but everything I write comes out as either a cheesy ballad, or it just sounds weird.

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I can understand ur problem. It always happen with every song writter. When you think u have nothing new, then u better go somewhere else like on vaction, that new envornement and new people may ignite a coupe of song. :P
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Old 06-16-2003, 06:45 PM
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I'll keep working with Walrus, see if we can come up with anything. Hey, you guys check out my 2 new solo lyrics on the music forum?

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Old 06-17-2003, 02:16 AM
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The Walrus is back, and he's ready to rock!

Adrian, what do you think to this as a first verse for your song?

Standin' here
Side by side
No one said it's an easy ride
Don't worry, cos I've got your back
Standin' tall
We're still free
Together we'll fight for the dream
One for all
and All for one
And all thats in between

Keep On Rockin'
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Man, that's exactly what I'm looking for! I'm glad you're back to work on these songs.

How 'bout this, for another verse:

I know we're seperated
By time and space, laws and rules
But I swear I'll fight
I'll stand by you
I'd do anything for you
Anything at all
And that's the truth

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Old 06-17-2003, 03:16 PM
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I like what I'm seeing! I've made a couple of changes, what do you think of this for the first verse and chorus?

Standin' here
Side by side
No one said it's an easy ride
Don't worry, cos I've got your back
Standin' tall
We're still free
Together we'll fight for the dream
One for all
and All for one
And all thats in between

I know we're seperated
By time and space, laws and rules
But I swear I'll fight
I'll stand by you
I'd do anything
And that's the truth


Chorus:
I swear, as I stand here
I'd Do Anything For You
Cos I know that you'd do the same for me
We can live and die together
But our fight will last forever
If you'll let me
I'll stand with you till the end
Because I call you friend

Keep On Rockin'
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Old 06-17-2003, 04:38 PM
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Great job! Just when I thought this song was dead...we've resurrected it!

I'm not too keen on the use of the "I know we're seperated..." part in the first verse, I'd like to save it for a later verse. Though I will admit, it works nice as a prechorus.

Keep up the good work,

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Standin' here
Side by side
No one said it's an easy ride
Don't worry, cos I've got your back
Standin' tall
We're still free
Together we'll fight for the dream
One for all
and All for one
And all thats in between

I know we're seperated
By time and space, laws and rules
But I swear I'll fight
I'll stand by you
I'd do anything
And that's the truth


Chorus:
I swear, as I stand here
I'd Do Anything For You
Cos I know that you'd do the same for me
We can live and die together
But our fight will last forever
If you'll let me
I'll stand with you till the end
Because I call you friend

Keep On Rockin'

great team you two !!!
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Old 06-17-2003, 10:57 PM
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How about this for another part of a verse:

They say they honor loyalty
It don't look that way to me
But I'm not giving in
I won't let go of what I believe

For all the "crap" that we been through
I never let 'em change my mind
I'll always be here for you
We'll come through this side by side

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Old 06-17-2003, 11:11 PM
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crap needs to be changed to shit.....

ah i get it now, inverted commas!
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