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Old 11-14-2003, 10:14 AM
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i have a recording for heartbreak towen.... can some onr post the second verse so i can do it properly....
If u give me couple of day time, i will post it by sunday. I can't wait to hear that one.
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Old 11-16-2003, 05:42 PM
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This my next verse

How do you feel if your world
suddenly turn into dark?, too dark
How do you take if your friends
finally torn your heart ?, to deep.
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1
Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running in all its vain
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town


Time was right, life was stright
Hard to imagine its all gone sight
Time to bring some smile back
Try to heal the some heart ache.
Time for leave town, the heartbreak town.


Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running in all its vain
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town.

What u guys think do u wanna change anything??.
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Old 11-16-2003, 11:40 PM
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ill englishize it for you.....

ill prolly play around with it a little anyhow just in terms of singability
but thats a spontaneous thing
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Old 11-17-2003, 03:32 AM
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Heartbreak Town
Allmike, Adrian
(c)11/2003

Verse 1

This is the town
Where I learn to fly higher
This is the town
Where I built dreams of colour
All this time
My friends were friends
Love was real and life was full

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

How would you feel
If your world suddenly went dark?
How would you feel
If your friends finally tore your heart?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running in all its vain
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town

Guitar Solo

Time was right, life was good
Hard to imagine its all gone down
Time to bring some smile back
Try to heal the some heartache
Time for leave town, the heartbreak town

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running in all its vain
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town

Its finished! Probably the fastest song we've written so far. Good job Allmike! What do you guys think?
Tawtami:Would you like me to PM you all our songs so far? That way you don't have to sort through the pages looking for the lyrics.
Walrus:You still working on The Secret Project?

Adrian
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What Part Of My Body Hurts The Most
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Come here now
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Old 11-17-2003, 10:37 AM
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Heartbreak Town
Allmike, Adrian
(c)11/2003

Verse 1

This is the town
Where I learn to fly higher
This is the town
Where I built dreams of colour
All this time
My friends were friends
Love was real and life was full

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

How would you feel
If your world suddenly went dark?
How would you feel
If your friends finally tore your heart?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running in all its vain
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town

Guitar Solo

Time was right, life was good
Hard to imagine its all gone down
Time to bring some smile back
Try to heal the some heartache
Time for leave town, the heartbreak town

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running in all its vain
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town

Its finished! Probably the fastest song we've written so far. Good job Allmike! What do you guys think?
Tawtami:Would you like me to PM you all our songs so far? That way you don't have to sort through the pages looking for the lyrics.
Walrus:You still working on The Secret Project?

Adrian
I like it and proud of it. Nice touches Adrian.
So what Walrus and sara think about it?.
Can someone pm me and tell me what is that secret project if u don't mind ofcourse.
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Old 11-17-2003, 01:23 PM
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that would be brilliant! it would save me so much time!

i got a friend with a hard disk recorder now means decent recording.

i have a question for you guys,
if you guys think any of these are any good, how would you feel about live performances?? ideally it would be amazing for us to all get together and do it, but that may take a while, LOL

i was thinking more about my band... obviously relevant people would get credit for the songs as written and stuff.... i havent really given any great thought to it yet.. its just one of those really late night ideas that you have sometimes.....

feel free to say no or whatever... just thought id throw that one out, and
do i like the song ?

i came up with the tune in 5 minutes...... YES

i will need to play around with the 2nd verse a bit... see how i can make it fit to the tune... any probs with that?


oh and i may well have a song soon... its kinda there... just need to make an attempt at actually getting it down lyrically... it might be a little dark/depressing though... so advance warning.

heh, and i too am beginning to wonder about this 'secret project'....
lol

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Old 11-17-2003, 01:38 PM
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okay this is the reworked version... nothing huge done except added a little to verse 2 where there was previously the end of the prechorus making it impossible to orchestrate... other than that only a couple of word alterations to make it fit. oh and (later thought) i think the bridge should be before the solo (have moved it on this as this is what im making the track from)

okayt so actually slightly more m ajopr changes than i anticipated.... having done it.. feel free to dismiss... or to keep... there are a few major changes.. will post again in a sec and highlight them.

thoughts questions comments?



Verse 1

This is the town
Where I learn to fly higher
This is the town
Where I built dreams of colour
All this time
My friends were friends
Love was real and life was full

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why do all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

What would you feel
If your world went dark?
How would you feel
If you lost your heart?
did you ever realise
you could ever feel so alone

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running through its veins

Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town

Bridge:

Time was right, and life was good
Hard to imagine that its all gone now
time to heal some heartache
Time to leave this heartbreak town

Guitar Solo (to verse) at least thats what i think it needs to be


Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running in all its vain
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town [/i][/quote]
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Old 11-17-2003, 01:47 PM
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additions in green, major changes in red, anything else in indigo
Verse 1

This is the town
Where I learn to fly higher
This is the town
Where I built dreams of colour
All this time
My friends were friends
Love was real and life was full

Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why do all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

What would you feel
If your world went dark?
How would you feel
If you lost your heart?
did you ever realise
you could ever feel so alone


Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why do all these dreams come crashing down?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running through its veins
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town

Bridge:

Time was right, and life was good
Hard to imagine that its all gone now
time to heal some heartache
Time to leave this heartbreak town


Guitar Solo (to verse) at least thats what i think it needs to be


Prechorus

Why does everything that starts so good have to end?
Why do all these dreams come crashing down again and again?
Too many questions
Too much pain
Too little comfort

Chorus 1

Blame it on life, blame it on love
All I know is its coming down
All I blame is this town
...Heartbreak Town.

Chorus 2

Its a Heartbreak Town
I'm still feeling the pain
Its a heartbreak Town
I'm still seeing the stains
Its a no-love town
Hate is running through its veins
Every smile is buried in its soil
I'm only a broken boy
Left to bleed and toil
In this Heartbreak Town
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Old 11-17-2003, 04:08 PM
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I like it! I think we all agree that you should make any adjustments to it that you feel will make it fit together musically. Keep up the good work! I don't know how everyone else would feel about you bringing your band into it. We'd kind of hoped to bring in JT musicians, but I'm ok with it, as long as they have a place too. That said, would anyone mind me contacting Arash to ask him about joining? He's a great guitar player, and writes good lyrics too. Live performances - I'm not sure how well that would work...

Expect the other songs to be PM'd to you later today.

Walrus:You want to tell them about The Secret Project, or would you rather release it first?

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gah...
knew i shoulda thought it out better before saying anything

ive been completely misunderstood.

forget i said anything
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