Originally Posted by Adrian

Allmike:I like the chorus you posted, but the verse seems more suited to poetry than song lyrics. I know you're a poet, that's why I say that. It doesn't seem to...I don't know...hook people into the song. Like "Back" for example, Walrus wrote an intro to the song that just immediately pulls you in. I don't think that this verse works very well for music. Much better for poetry I think. I'm gonna toy around with the chorus though. That's very good. Do you mind if I drop the "Trying is what I do best" line?
Walrus:You still there?

What would you guys think about writing a prequel to Back Into Dry County? A song explaining why our fictional character left, that sort of thing. Any thoughts?

Adrian