Tawtami:I picture this to be a hard, pounding rock song. Real hard. Though if that doesn't appeal to you, feel free to change that. Harder than HMU is what I have in mind.
Walrus:What's this project? Are we going to write for an actual musician?

Adrian

I'm agree with Walrus, you don't need to put win or lose in verses. It is better if you put like
winner not always win
losser not always lose.

cool, thanks for that- info much appreciated and useful... im gonna play around with itas i wait for exposed (one of my ballads) to upload - btw, if anyone wants it pm me...

can reveal a bit about the distractions now....

basically, we ve got a provisional date to do some recording that should work for the duo im half of... its nice cause we have complete control cause were basically borrowing the three pieces of equipment we dont currntly own to do it...

also have had a spate of new songs arrive for me cause of stuff thats happened with being ill....
(if i get round to recording at some point, i could use some muso's who'd be up for it... ) anyone interested.. it will prolly be next summer i guess as people tend to be free in summer...

so yeah all of that tied up with hospital visits etc, but im back now... for a while anyhow... however- i do go away next saturday morning for a week.. and then im house sitting but am v close to uni so have got a 5 meg pipe with noone on it down the road :D so will be around mainly daytimes, as opposed to now when am at home and on at night
so yeah... ill come back in a lil while to see whats what...hopefully with new thing.. amn keeping track of all sugestions...

sara

k, have taken the title out of the first verse and replaced that and changed a couple of words in other places to make it scan.
the chorus's look has changed slightly but only that - that was just a personal thingy as to how im hearing it at the moment. feel free to put it back...
i dunno what do people think?
sara
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You want to know how to live?
The future's so far away
I've got these words for you
Try to live in today
whats to come
It doesn't matter
Right here right now
Not what comes after

(chorus)

You can hope
You can pray
But all the good things
have to change
It doesn't matter if you Win Or Lose
Its how you
play the game today
All you try
and all you say
It doesn't matter what you do
Its how you play the game... (stretched last syllable and slight break)

Not if you Win Or Lose

Well, I wrote the end of the song:

All the struggle
All your pain
Don't you think
It was in vain
When all of this is though
It doesn't matter if you Win Or Lose
Its how you've played the game

Tawtami:I'd like to go back a bit on my hard rock song description. Picture crossing Undivided or Hey God with The Distance. Something with heavy guitar and drums, but slower sounding verses, then soaring choruses. That's what I imagine.

Adrian

Great work guys. :P
So walrus what is the big suspense?.

thats fine with me!!!!

thats actually how id heard it to start with which was why the choruses were laid out how they were....

and yeah i can hear that working....well...
:)

If more people would have joind this group, we would have great team. :D

How bout this as the last bit in the first verse?

Not all winners win
And not all losers lose
Sometimes it'll be hard
But the price to win is truth

And here's another bit:

It won't help to complain
Our words are all in vain
Just try and remember
The only thing that's up to you
Is how you play the game

What do you guys think?

Adrian

Also, if we don't have a lead singer, you guys might want to try asking Iceman to take a look at what we've got. He'd be great!

Adrian