Can you tell me UR opinion on my poem?
 

well this 2 days ago my girlfriend broke up with me and I'm totally heart broken.about her?sure but I've lost girlfriends before so I know I'll get over that the real reson my heart is broken is that she has a son(who is 1 year old) who I love like my own son and the hardest thing I've ever had to do is say good bye to him,nothing in my life has ever hurt me more so I wrote this poem and I'd like to see what you guys think of it and if ya think I should give it to her.

here it goes:

A Stepdad's Goodbye

The moment we first met
I held you in my arms
I made you my best friend
I promised to love you 'till the end

Although our live's will change
My heart remains the same
Cause even though we are apart
You're memory lives in my heart

You always were a special one
Your magic inside won't come undone
I'll never forget the moment's that we had
I'll always love you like my own son

Don't worry about me I'll be allright
anything you need , I will provide
I'm already proud of the man you will become
I'll always love you like my own son.


Thanx
tell me what you think

Javier... that is so sweet! Very touching. Wow..

Tash

WOW..that is very touching. Really sad.

that's a very beautiful poem...i think you should give it to her. i know how it hurts to lose someone that you love, try to make her understand that you love her son as your own son, and that it's very hard for you to be away from him. i really hope she understands, good luck! :)

This is a very touching poem. I hope you give this poem to her just so that she sees how much your relationship with her son means to you. I wish you all the best with this

Stephanie

very heartfelt
 

this is a very touching poem,
I think your feelings are very sweet, I was in a similar position a while ago, with a child involved, but I must say man, your very young, and I think you should be careful... I know what it feels like, but you also have to remember that there will be others, possibly even your own, and you have lots of time!

Regards,
Stay

I know that man.but the more I try to think about moving on letting it be He's the first thing I think about when I wake up and the last thing in my mind when I go to bed.I was always expecting to fall in love with my ex girlfriend but it was so unexpected to fall in love with him.nothing has ever inspired me more or filled my heart the way that a simple hug from that kid could do.and I see so much of myself in him(parents separated and very expresive he was always hugin me).I don't know what to do because even though 3 years from now I'll remember him vividly he won't remember me.

I think that your poem is wonderful. When adults split up - kids get caught in the crossfire. Unfortunately - sometimes the adults do too.
You know - I've heard people (in general) badmouth guys as being cold and unfeeling in relationships. Some of you guys on this board are so different from this stereotype that it blows me away. Your poem for example and recently reading about Jag's situation makes me really admire you guys.

Kathleen

ppl said i was too young to marry..and they stil do but i did...and i also have two god children..whom i just dont see much anymore...and it hurts cos i want to see them grow up...and i pray that i will...take it from someoen who knows, if u get the chance to be with the kid, no matter how small the chance is, take it with both hands and dont let go.....